What do you think of this story, not finished yet!!?

As she gazes up at the stars on this icy cold night she reflects on her life, wondering about the places she has been and the people she has left behind. She realises that she is completely alone know. Running from place to place, hiding from the inevitable. She puts out her cigarette and goes back to waiting tables at the restaurant where she has been working for the past 3 months, it is a small place doesn't pay well but that suits her as not to many people come in and she can keep an eye on who comes in and out.

Flavio (Her boss) shouts at her to close up, and after another twelve hour shift she is tired, they both have the customary shot of Vodka before heading off to her flat in the old town, her home is basic with a hop and a kettle, all her clothes are still in the suitcase ready for another quick getaway, being on the run is a lonely life and after ten years the strain is beginning to show.

Being the place she has stayed the longest in ten years Sophia is beginning to enjoy her life in Prague she has made a few friends and no-one from her past have been close for the past twelve months, she hasn't seen or heard of any suspicious people hanging around and now she is starting to relax for the first time in ten years. She is a beautiful tall slim 26 year old with long thick black hair with piercing blue eyes which being on the run can cause a problem, she cannot risk getting involved with men she has to stay strong it would be a mistake to fall in love right now, if ever.

Sophia has very little experience with the opposite sex and when one night she goes out with some of the other waitresses she meets someone, he is tall and hansom and Sophia loses all her senses that she has spent so long building up, she falls completely in love with him. After 3 months of dating Sophia has been in Prague for 7 months now she is very happy and believes that she is finally safe now.

Petr and Sophia are blissfully in love as the walk hand in hand along Wenceslas Square, Petr is taking Sophia to the Opera, the first time she has been since her father took her to see Carmen in Moscow for the 15th Birthday. Sophia loved the Opera and dancing she was training to be a ballerina and was accepted in to the prestigious Bolshoi Ballet School, she never made it to her first day.

What do you think of this story, not finished yet!!?opera singer

Your story has me asking questions like "Why is she running?" and "Is her past about to catch up with her? What is it? What will happen?" Your small taster on here has got me wanting to turn the page %26amp; see what happens next. It's one one of the signs of good writing when you keep the reader turning the pages because they feel that "I must find out what happens next"!

I don't even usually read this sort of thing. I'm a hard core science fiction type!!

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What do you think of this story, not finished yet!!?amc theater opera theater

Somewhat interesting. Need to do spell check and maybe some re-vamping of a few sentances, but overall, not too bad.
Dont give up the day job.
dudette i think u gotta cool story line but is that the first chapter or something? coz its really confusing u just put each idea into one paragragh without telling us what happend after or before. i dunno whatever. keep working on it! itll be good! btw why is spohia running?
I really liked it, but I honestly feel like I`ve already read this book.which is a compliment. Now it`s driving me crazy lol
don't take too much criticism to heart.

everybody writes in a different style or thinks up there stories and writes in different ways. you may not even know the ending of your story yet, some people know the ending before they've even got there.

take as much time as you need in writing... .and never give up... even when you get writers block (which is what i've got at the moment).

as for your story - it's not my place to comment because it's only a short snippet and not finished.
go on, don't give up: it's sounds quite interesting
It's fairly bland, to be honest.

It definitely seems like something someone would write just because they were bored.
I think it is really good for an off the top of your head story

I take it you don't write stories in your spare time then otherwise you wouldn't be asking our opinions but not bad at all for a first timer
get a dictionary and sort out your punctuation.

other than that it might win a richard and judy book award (you can decide whether that's a compliment)
Interesting. don't give up. Every single novel I ever tried to write in a notebook ended up in my attic. Unfinished and forgotten. Don't give up. It looks like you'll be a great novelist or are you already that? Keep up the good work! Take care!
being on the run is a lonely life and after ten years the strain is beginning to show.

start with this sentence

then make something happen-quickly

throw in some conflict/struggle/life-changing decision

and bob's your uncle
You seem to have a good story line in mind but you are cramming too much into it. Telling us too much about the character and her life, when readers imagination works better when it is starved of facts. If you just want this as a short story then don't worry about letting the reader know everything about them, just small things you say about the character can let us make up our own views of the character, such as decribeing to us how she might put the cigerette out or how she talks to her boss or how she walks. Think more into the present of her life, if it was a novel you could talk about her past, even if you want to put some of her past into it, feeling that it goes with the story then just add two lines about it now and then. I think the first paragraph was good, we got into her mind a little bit, and YOU were writing creatively which is hard for people that have not done it before. But the rest is like a police report. I think with more practise and time, you could produce a good short story. Also some spelling mistakes I noticed as well but hey I write alot and my grammar isn't up too scratch yet :) xx
If you expect people to read your work and give you a free critique, then the most you can do is offer your work grammatically correct and spelling mistake free, You have done neither. If you want to be taken seriously as a writer then you need to address these problems.